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your running through the woods. you've just robbed a bank. you can hear the policeman behind you. he sounds farther away with each step. finally hes gone. you think your in the clear when all a sudden you see a flash of red and black. an ice cold hand brushes you by and your imdeatly paralized. two firery red eyes stare at you through the darkness. they dissapear then everything goes black. you hear a soft whisper in your ear, "gottcha". when you wake up you have silver bracelets on your hands, an orange jump suit on, and are in a cell. you can faintly make out a carving in the wall. the masked girls saying "gottcha".

cursed

                                                  Chapter 1
i ran across the beach screaming. Tears flooding my eyes. My friend Holly stopped me a look of total shock and terror crossing her face. "w-wh-whats wr-wrong?!?" she asked a quiver in her voice. a million horrid thoughts were running through her mind. "I-I-I saw Phantom!' i said. all of a sudden Holly burst into laughter. she laughed so hard that tears streamed from her eyes. she tried to catch her breath, gasping for air, but for some reason that only made her laugh harder! all of a sudden my terror turned into anger. "its NOT funny! i yelled. "you are too supersticious!" she said back now wipeing her face from her little fit of laughing. its true i am superstitious but i have good reasons. one is that i was born on a leap year october 13 a friday, at exactly midnight, and a full moon! the most terrifying night that of course only happens every 8 years! of course i was the unlucky person born on this exact night. 

whats this about?

Now as you read my title you may be wondering "whats this about?" if you aren't then I don't know what to tell you. This blog is all about you critiquing my writing. I'll write a glimpse of what I'm working on as being the youngest person to publish a book and you'll tell me if you like it! Most likely I will switch up between books that I'm working on but I'll always put the book and chapter I'm reading from. hope you find this interesting and like my blog!